[I wrote this poem over a span of one month. As the poem is long , I shall post it in parts every Friday. It’s a poem about love but some may find the content semi-erotic. Lest their finer senses be disturbed, be aware and proceed at your own risk.]
Link to the previous part : https://wp.me/p73yZZ-4lw
Part I (continued)
Please come near.
Age has robbed my vision;
It is not as clear.
You say it does not matter,
You promise to speak,
If I keep my eyes shut
And let my
Feelings speak.[5]
My hands cupped in yours,
Lilting voice I
Waited so long to hear.
Lovingly you spoke.
“Keep your eyes closed, my dear, and
Feel me with your imagination,
Fill my heart with tender words,
Words of passion, not of lust,
Words that a life-time will last.” [6]
Touch me, my love, with your feelings
From head to toe,
And whisper those words of love
In my ear.
Let your imagination sculpt
A picture of my youth,
I shall always carry with me.
Let the passion flow
And let us flow
In the torrents of love.
Vagaries of time may be cruel,
But we shall have enough,
To last a lifetime and more.[7]
Don’t hold back my dear,
I have felt your touch before;
The rousing passion,
Love mingled with lust,
The explorations and the discoveries,
All inhibitions shredded,
All these years I have carried you
Inside me.
Today, let me hear in your words,
Strip me bare,
And let me feel myself,
In your words,
Let me quench my thirst.[8]
[November 25, 2020]
© Pranabendra Sarma, 2021
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Wow. You are writing an a love ballad.
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Only time will tell my friend what it turns out to be.😀
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😊😊
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The way old feelings and emotions are evoked is powerful!
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Thank you so much Ritu.
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Posted Stanzas 9-12 (PartII) of From Vault of Memories Past today
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Posted stanzas 13-16 of From Vault of Memories Past today.
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Yes, this part rings true, the words are well-chosen precise and full of passion. A suggestion if you’re looking for one, is to look at the terms of endearment. Maybe just stick to one? It’s just a thought. Maybe because the ‘my dear’ sounds very old-fashioned to me, and I’ve never met anyone who uses it. It’s what the big bad wolf says to Little Red Riding Hood. ‘love’ seems to me more universal. But that’s just my personal impression.
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Thanks Jane. Appreciate your comments and feedback.
‘ my dear’ – agree with what you say. I have used ‘love’ also. I am sure in the final editing there will be more changes.
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It’s a personal thing so it depends what expression you would use.
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Yes but honest feedbacks are much appreciated.
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🙂
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Posted Stanzas 9-12 (PartII) of From Vault of Memories Past today.
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